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She walked down the abandoned work road, even though the moon had vanished from the sky, she could hear movement around her... Partially based on a real event
(#) RCPAD 2006-11-25 08:11:34 AMWow. If you wanted to break my brain, you definately succeded, The Brainless Raven.
Are you trying to break a record in new awfulness, or are you just trying to torture people until they claw their eyes out? Probably the lather.
You know what, if you gave up writing, the world would be such a happier place. No more people setting themselves on fire, no more wars, no more crucifications, etc.
You wouldn't be over 2000 years old, would you? Because, that would explain why you're such a bad writer. And, I get the feeling you might be the reason Jesus Christ died... they didn't crucify him because they thought he was a demon-spawn, they crucified him to take out the pain they felt reading your shitty-ass stories!
- I think that it's okay. I don't think it needed such harsh words either. I won't say it's bad but maybe you could adapt it to third person, put a little more description in about the character. That should really perk it up :) Keep going. You can only get better with practise