(#) alyssaatthedisco 2006-11-25I really like the idea of this story so far. My favourite lines were by far the "Panic! who?" bit. It made me laugh. Good job, and my only suggestion is that near then end when there is a lot of talking, the reader can't really tell who is saying what, there isn't any way of differentiating. Keep it up! :)
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