Harry Potter was never the Boy-Who-Lived, his brother was. Sirius took care of Harry and his very unqiue ability, what will happen?
- Good Idea for a story, but loose the comments inserted. They break the flow of the story, and are meaningless if you haven't seen the film in question, or just can't remember it. Second biggest problem, none of the characters seen so far have any traits out of the books, making it not so much fanfiction, just fiction. Your characters could all be called Jo for the recognisability.