[Kaiba x Yami Bakura ficlet] Seto Kaiba has no desire whatsoever to beat his rival with the help of 'stupid parlour tricks' - but Yami Bakura keeps trying to change his mind.
- This is well done and your English has obviously improved.
As to the point of view, thank you for using third person. All of those first person POV's are irritating as hell.
I think what Michelle meant was that since this story, so far, has been told through Yami Bakura's thoughts, it might be nice to see what Kaiba thinks, for a change.
Whether you continue this or not, it's a good one.
Author's responseWell, I feel appropriately stupid for not having figured out what Michelle meant for myself g
Thank you very much for the review!