[Kaiba x Yami Bakura ficlet] Seto Kaiba has no desire whatsoever to beat his rival with the help of 'stupid parlour tricks' - but Yami Bakura keeps trying to change his mind.
(#) Michelle 2006-12-11 07:20:05 AMI like your story so far, but i'd like to know the Point of view of who is narrating it. But I'm also a seto kaiba fan too :p continue on.
Author's responseThank you for the review! :) This won't be continued though – after this, there's probably just off-screen-sex. (And maybe Yami's demise. Probably not, though, at the rate at which they're going.)
I'm not sure what you mean with point of view... It's third person, and part of it is extern focus, and part of it are Bakura's thoughts - but I hoped that it would be clear from the story itself...
- This is well done and your English has obviously improved.
As to the point of view, thank you for using third person. All of those first person POV's are irritating as hell.
I think what Michelle meant was that since this story, so far, has been told through Yami Bakura's thoughts, it might be nice to see what Kaiba thinks, for a change.
Whether you continue this or not, it's a good one.
Author's responseWell, I feel appropriately stupid for not having figured out what Michelle meant for myself g
Thank you very much for the review!