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by journeythrutime 3 Reviews


Category: Panic! At The Disco - Rating: G - Genres: Romance - Characters:  - Published: 2006/12/10 - Updated: 2006/12/11 - 355 words


  • A Fever You Cant Possibly Sweat Out

    (#) xImRadx 2006-12-10 06:16:39 PM

    Well, I read your whole story, and from the first chapter it seemed interesting enough, and the plot line didnt seem bad. The chapters were a little short, but other wise. It seemed like a good start, but then from there it seemed to go slightly down hill. The good story line is still there, but you need to work on writing it a little better. Np aim lingo or any of that and use Paranethese. "Like this" Im not putting you or your story down, cause I belive its a good story, just giving you a little constructive critisism. So you can improove and make your story even better! ^_^

    Try making the chapters longer and make it neater. Other wise, good story in the making. I like it...

    Author's response

    yea thanks!!
    like i wrote this story a while ago.
    i decided to post all of my stories that i found in my computer.
    il try to continue it, its just i have sooo many that i kinda leave off and then start and then start again.
    but thanks for the review!!!
  • A Fever You Cant Possibly Sweat Out

    (#) xImRadx 2006-12-10 06:17:29 PM

    Ps...its supposed to be No aim lingo...not np aim lingo.

    See everyone makes mistakes.
  • A Fever You Cant Possibly Sweat Out

    (#) kristina1 2006-12-13 11:11:46 AM

    I love it please keep going!!!^_^

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