(#) luckysgc921 2006-12-13 02:34:57 PMi liked it very much. I liked it so much I took time out of getting ready to head into NYC to review/rate it. :)
Lola is such an incredibly cool character--shes original, very anti-marysue, and just plain fun.
I gotta ask though--is that a real "seventeen" magazine article? cause if so--thud.
loves it! :)
Author's responseIt kills me to say this, but yes, it's an actually article that was published in Seventeen magazine. Sad, yes? Quite. But thanks for sitting down and reviewing, very awesome of you. Have fun in New York, love.
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-12-13 05:06:29 PMi absolutely loved Lolas reaction to hearing the song on the radio. i don't think she squealed though. i think that was "squeal" worthy.
anywho, pete can shove his damn tulips. fuck tulips, i always say. actually, i've never said that. but i would.
and a merching Lola...that should be interesting. i'm stoked. i'm almost spelled "stocked". that's how stoked i am.
take a rating point.
Author's responseI knew my reaction bit was missing something. Oh well. I guess Lola is just not a squealer...is it me or did that sound dirtier than it should have? cuddles with rating point
(#) poisonedhalo 2006-12-14 04:38:21 AMawwww is there a lil patrick action going to happen?? but it was cute of pete to appologize:D
keep it up dude believe me ur updates r the highlight of my day
Author's responseNow my ego is going to be insufferable. And of course there will be some crazy Patrick loving in up coming chapters, believe me.
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-12-14 05:19:48 AMMrs. Parish was a regular who would faithfully patron our shop every week or so to have something done. Nails manicured, hair trimmed or styled, eyebrows waxed and whatnot. She was a plump older woman with distinguished gray hair and make up slathered across her wilted, lathered face. Her thin lips remained in a permanent, lipstick-smothered sneer. Nothing positive or even remotely polite escaped her puckered trap, yet she always asked for me. The only thing that made her bearable was her amazing ability to leave an unbelievable and undeserved tip. -> I am very impressed with your … eye (?) for details here. Fleshing out minor characters like this gives the reader a more vivid pictures of Lo’s world. Great DoJ work!
The radio scene was unique. Things like that often come off as cliché. Not with Kyle of the DoJ, of course. :)
The Dad-patting was slightly disgusting. I liked it.
To be overly redundant and… repetitive: This story is fiiiiine entertainment. Or so says my rating point. Tschüß for now.
Author's responseI love details. They keep a story interesting. I try not to get too intense. I think I have been on the verge with Mrs. Parish...but who knows. Dad patting is digusting? Since when? Older, jewish men need love too. :O...ew, I went too far with that.
- OK! I'm caught up! Whoo Hoo! I promise I will not abandon this story again, and how could I? It is way too good! So, of course I'm way excited to see what drama will ensure on the Warped. I can't wait!
Also, I love the older brother/younger sister interaction. It makes me miss my brother.
This story rules! The End.
Author's responseCeCe! Hi! You better not abandon me again. I'll find you and make you like my dumb story. Now go and update Cloak and Dagger before I explode.