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Sometimes

How DO you deal with another person inside your mind? (Haru-centric)

Category: Fruits Basket - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Angst, Drama - Characters:  - Warnings: [!] - Published: 2005/05/05 - Updated: 2005/05/06 - 1262 words - Complete

Reviews

• Sometimes

  (#) xelhaspixiestix 2005-05-11 02:36:09 PM

  This was very, very well done -- especially the background about the former-Ox, and her journals. You might want to flesh out the Yuki Haru interaction, but then that might just be me and my opinion of Haru. But still -- very nice.

  Author's response

  Thanks! Yeah, I wasn't sure when I wrote it how far it'd go. But then Haru got to Yuki and got the answer that he needed out of him, and all of the tension just sort of...disappeared, and I figured that was a sign to leave it right there. :)

• Sometimes

  (#) Moira 2005-08-11 08:43:29 PM

  i thought that was lovely. and i agree with your decision to leave the exchange between yuki and haru as is. sometimes it's better to just let a few words begin the scene that the imagination will fill out in full color on its own.
  
  
  
  Author\'s Response: Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. :) This was a story that I picked at in bits and pieces, and so I've never really gotten a good feel for whether it felt "done" or not. Thanks for the input. :)

• Sometimes

  (#) leviathan 2006-03-07 07:00:21 AM

  oh wow. OO I love this one! hatsuharu has always been one of my favorite characters, and there's just not enough introspective pieces from his POV. it's good to see one written well. ^--^

• Sometimes

  (#) aiIenzo 2006-12-30 03:39:01 PM

  That was very...I'm trying not to use the word "insightful," but it does describe it very well. You look into Haru in an original sense, and created something wonderful and thought-provoking out of it. Very well written. And I loved the exchange between Haru and Yuki.

• Sometimes

  (#) alloreli 2007-03-12 04:13:19 PM

  I luuv it. I think that this story is very well written. It's insightful into Haru's thoughts. I never really thought about what White Haru thought about turning Black.

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