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Death Becomes You

I suck at summerys, but here goes: Dorimono is a muerderious lunitic, only waiting, for the the next target to appaer. Elenor is in for the fight of her life, that she just may lose...! Please Re...

Category: Fantasy - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Horror - Characters:  - Published: 2006/12/30 - Updated: 2006/12/31 - 620 words

Reviews

• Death Becomes You

  (#) Reko 2007-01-02 02:40:15 PM

  Heyy Please Reveiw My Story!!!!!!
  I would love some critisism, good or bad, I don't care!!
  Reveiw, Pleas!!!

• Death Becomes You

  (#) Greater_Basilisk 2007-01-31 10:36:39 PM

  It's a good effort, but you really need to work on punctuation and grammar. Don't randomly switch between past and present tenses, watch how you place your commas, and try not to repeat the same word twice in the same or consecutive sentences.

  Author's response

  Thank yu for the reveiw and I will definitly work on that stuff;)
  

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