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(#) MarkPoa 2007-01-11 10:18:41 PM
Nice. I like the beat in this story brought about by the repetition of "you". I think you missed the meter at a point, though, since a part felt short.Author's response
Thanks so much for reading and taking time to review. Yes, I think I've found the point you're thinking of, and I agree, it seems I've missed something there. I'll work on rearranging the line. Thanks again for the help! -
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(#) MyVengefulRomance 2007-02-02 04:55:30 PM
le gasp OMG, how come no song writer has ever hired you???? That was like...like song lyrics. nods It had a beat, and the repetition was well done. I applaud you. The world needs more poetry. (I'm sad to admit this...I only clicked on this because of your name: it rocks out loud. I only really read My Chemical Romance stories on this site, but now I think I'll start going into the original fiction sections.) GREAT JOB!!! -
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(#) EEfan 2007-06-17 10:18:48 AM
Absolutely fantastic, and the words are so true! It actually reminded me of a similar situation that i've been in for a while so great job of summing it up so perfectly.