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To whom it may concern

A warning delivered too late.

Category: Sci-Fi - Rating: G - Genres: Sci-fi - Characters:  - Published: 2007/02/07 - Updated: 2007/02/07 - 660 words - Complete

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• To whom it may concern

  (#) Rous 2007-02-15 05:18:45 AM

  Very nicely constructed. However, there is a lot missing. Is this part of something bigger?
  
  I did find a couple of niggles.
  Third paragraph- worrying to worrisome.
  Fifth paragraph- commenced means beginning.
  
  Again, a good story, as far as it goes.
  Thank you for sharing.
  
  rous

  Author's response

  Commenced does mean beginning, which was the intent. You're right about this being a part of something bigger. It's the only part that's really been put into story form though, and I don't foresee any other part of it getting into such a form. If some other idea comes up, I'll do it, but I wouldn't hold my breath.
  
  I came back to reread some of my old stuff after a while, and hey, in the fifth paragraph commenced is used wrong. Sorry for brushing you off, I thought I had used it oddly, but intentionally, somewhere else, and didn't bother to investigate. Maybe that'll show me.

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