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Bugganes and Cigarettes

Sam will learn to duck on time, if only to avoid he way Frank acts afterward.

Category: Fantasy - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Fantasy - Characters:  - Published: 2007/02/10 - Updated: 2007/02/10 - 1483 words - Complete

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• Bugganes and Cigarettes

  (#) Vashti 2007-02-10 09:03:51 PM

  I liked what I read, but I also found it a bit confusing... or maybe a better word would be abrupt. I think this could be a really excellent story if it was two or three times longer. Maybe start out with Frank pointing the gun and shooting and then go into a monologue in which the protagonist gives a bit of background information (like, is this a summer job or is he a student on an extended trip, something.)
  
  I did enjoy the dialog though. ^_^

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