The best way to ace a job interview is to show up on time and be exactly what your perspective boss is looking to see. But sometimes it just doesn't work that way.
"Albus Dumbledore deliberately laid his hands flat on the desk in front of him. If he steepled them any longer he was afraid the Church of England would declare them a sanctuary."
If an absolutely brilliant line. Well done!
Author's responseThanks, actually the line about the CoE and DD's steepled fingers is likely my personal favorite in the story so far, I'm glad to see that someone else enjoyed it too. BJH
- Oooh, nasty nasty cliffhanger. Very nice job on the banter inbetween the two mages, extremely well crafted. I loved how you managed to keep Dumbledore wary but at the same time trusting. The line about him being worried about parents and students not trusting the competency of the DADA professors past was bueatiful. Keep up the great work!
- Obviously Harry's little trick of changing broken windows didn't work at all if the aurors could figure things out. Since they leak like a sieve, Voldemort and Draco will already know about Harry. Too bad, it would have been fun to milk it for a while, but I'm sure you know what you're doing.
Author's responseAh, but it wasn't meant to fool the Aurors, just to give the inspectors from Scotland Yard an easy out for their investigation. Besides, how could Harry resist needling Draco about his wonderful father dying in some homosexual, murder-suicide pact? BJH
(#) E. Killjoy 2007-02-18 07:46:07 AMThis is good. I like the characterization of Dumbledore very much. Harry is truely interesting. The one problem I have is that Harry's dimension crossing makes no sence. You need to explain how it happened.
Aside from that, you've successfully taken a dull old cliche and given it an interesting new twist.
In future chapters you may want to work on Narcissa's personality, aka give her one. I think she has a lot of potential that you have yet to utilize, or she is just the scared little trophy-wife you portray her is.
I adore The ending to this lattest chapter. It leaves me wanting more. I must also commend the way you've gone about portraying Moody. He's interesting.
In conclusion, do update soon. I very much enjoy this fic.
(#) apocalypso 2007-02-18 01:12:08 PMIncredible. Just incredible, and I can't wait to see more of this. The culture, the reactions to the slightest of phrases...it's brilliant. What's even better is that I can tell that you don't have to even think this through much before writing a scene full of dialogue and political games, it seems to flow so naturally.
Brilliant stuff, good luck writing more.