Wherein Harry reveals himself to his company and makes a promise to Belle
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-03-03 08:08:01 AMI'm interested in how this is going to play out. You obviously have Harry in love with two women now. The unbreakable vow proves this. I'm curious as to when you plan on involving Ron and Hermione in this story line at all. By this chapter it is obvious that you have some animosity towards the other two members of the trio. I look forward to your next update.
Author's responseAs always, thanx for reading and reviewing. What can I say, Harry has a lot of love to go around. Ron and Hermione will fgure into the story later in the summer. I have no animosity toward Ron and Hermione, but Belle is VERY protective of her bondmate. . .
I plan to update by Wednesday.
- I am loving this story. This was a swet chapter for Harry and Belle. I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
Author's responseThank you for reading and responding, and thanx for the kind words. I plan to put up the next chapter by Wednesday.
(#) glazedlookineyes101 2007-03-03 12:52:58 PMNice. My fave part is when Harry keeps telling them "not yet", lol. I also like the ending of this chapter when Harry reassures Bella that she is a totally different person now. I am DEFINATELY looking forward to the meeting between Bella and Marietta. Bella and Harry get along but the two women have never even spoken to one another. Keep up the great work and I hope to see the next part soon!
Author's responseAs always, thanx for reading and reviewing. I had fun visualizing the "not yet" meeting and would love to see that gag on the silver screen someday. I'll update on Wednesday, stay tuned. . .
- chuckles I loved how Harry finally came clean to his staff. I can't say again how much I'm liking this story and can't wait for more. Though, I am sensing some dislike for Ron and Hermione. Keep up the great work!
Author's responseI want Harry to be a very open and honest character, generous and forgiving of spirit. I also want to view his friends from a more critical point of view. I have no animosity toward Ron and Hermione, but Belle is very protective, n'est-elle pas?
- so they made a vow that harry will die for her. interesting wonder when that will be tested?update soon
Author's responseAs always, thanx for reading and reviewing. Ths s a test of the unbreakable vow system, this is only a test. . . bweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! I plan to update on Wednesday.
- So far so good, though I must admit I'm starting to itch for the upcomming assult and rescue to take place (it's been a long time comming).
I really hope Belle, Marie and Harry manage to find a way to stay together and perhaps formalize their relationship.
The scene with the drinks was great fun, and the pillow-talk and oath was moving - though I hope Harry doesn't drift away (and manage to patch things up) with Hermione and Ron... although they'll undoubtfully will have "issues" with Bella, Marie and Harry's daughter. When it comes the Durselys, I hope Harry present them to his wifes (getting a bit ahead of myself) and daughter (and perhaps Ron and Hermione), and let them (especially Belle) have a "talk" to them.
I'm also very much wondering how Ron, Hermione and his other friends will react to him getting a daughter - not to mention his girlfriends.
Speaking of friends, will Hermione and Ron be involved in the final show-down with Voldemort (not necesserely the rescue though)?
Even if you end the story before, I hope there will be sequels about Alexis growing-up and going to Hogwarts.
On a general note, your writing has greatly improved from the first chapters which I found somewhat disorganized. I still find the "army-speak" a bit hard to interpert, and would have prefered it to be slightly more... well, English. Finally, I hope there will be some more smut-scenes soon.
Keep up the great work.
Author's responseWow, as always, thank you for reading and your exhaustive review, I appreciate the amount of work you put in to it, truly. There will be a showdown, it will involve all of the principles and it'll happen before the end of summer, we hope to have Belle out of there very soon. I would like to see Alexis going to a school of witchcraft and wizardry, but it may not be Hogwarts. The future is not written in stone. . .
(Cryptic enough for ya?)
- Rushed, so very rushed, compared to most of the chapters please just slow down a tic.
Author's responseThank you for reading and reviewing. Pace is a little difficult for me, many things seem to happen too quickly and others anot quckly enough, ceest- ce pareil pour vous?
- Considering their age, while Belle is right about Ron and Hermione, I think she's being more than a tad too harsh. We'll see where you take this.
Author's responseThank you for reading and reviewing, the real 'fun' will be when Harry and his new family meet the old gang on the occasion of Bill and Fleur's wedding. There will be quite a lot to take in!