Reno/Cloud (or it could be a Cloud/Reno) Reno's lover dies and he is thrown into the deepest depths of despair. Warnings: extreme angst, character death (not Reno), sad Reno (yes, that is a war...
(#) Final Fantasy Fanatic 2007-03-12 11:52:21 AMI was just looking around and this was the first story I decided to read. And... never mind. the Ill just get too the down and dirty.
First off, Critiqing. It was confusing at first who had died. My first thoughts were Rude since they're the ones working togeather. Heck, the two are casual enemies in FF7 and something like that in advent children. How they ended being lovers (much less allies)escapes me at the moment. Another thing is that alot of the "fine details" you left out about the turks (for example IF you make it the turks, you must be stong-bodied enough to take on near death experiances, then just dust it off like it was just another
mission) and cloud as a SOLDIER makes me think you either have not played the game enough or was just to centered on the tragedy to remember the other fine bits. So to speak.
However, all of this does not mean you did a bad job. While there IS room for improvement, You do express the deep dispair one would feel as though some part of themselves had just died, and could not let anyone see it. Which is how I think reno would feel. Turks are tough but there is a limit somewhere to the pain.
Overall: 7/10 Could be Better, could be worse.
Author's responseI admit that I honestly don't know how they became lovers either. I think it is another crack fic that people have fallen in love with. I have been reading alot of reno/cloud fics and I woke up with this floating around in my head, bothering me. I didn't go into alot of detail because I didn't really want to center it on 'Cloud dies, Reno mourns', but on more universal 'losing a lover, decline emotionally'. I appreciate and accept your critique and I am happy that you like it despite your critique of it. I also admit that I have not played the game, I have seen the movie, please don't hate me for being deprieved of video games as a child! I didn't have a choice in the matter! I wish I could play the game now... Anyway, thank you for taking time to write a review. It is very much appreciated!
(#) F F fantatic 2007-03-12 11:55:18 AMOk, dang it all, I made a misake in my typeing. so sue me. IN the second paragraph I was referring to cloud, not ruse as casual eneimies.
Just goes to show that we all make misteaks. I mean mistakes. yeah.
Author's responseYes, yes, dear. Of course we all make mistakes! Good heavens, I know I do! ^_^ (I forgive you. lol)
- I understood it completely, and thought it was beautifully written. A drabble like this doesn't need a background story to be good. Looking forward to reading more from you.
Author's responseThank you very much! i didn't really want the background in this one and I appreciate you sticking up for my writing! bows thank you!