Things continue to get harder. Plus you get to meet a figure from your history texts.
(#) slaphanson 2007-03-14 08:09:20 PMMaybe you thought killing was the right thing to do but it just isn't write, even if it does advance the story. Harry has lost his only friend after and losing Sirius and Cedric before that it just doesn't seem right. I'm alright with killing Bill at somepoint in the future maybe closer to the defeat of Voldemort but doing it now just takes away one aspect which makes Bungle in the Jungle unique. Now it just seems that he is going to go back to England tell Fleur how Bill died go back to school and after some more people die and the horcruxs are destroyed he will fight Voldemort, it really doesn't seem like there will be any point of him making friends/allies, or just being Harry. Having Bill around gives you a lot more options with regards to later in the story because as it stands now the Order and weasleys will blame Harry for being a arrogant kid that got Bill killed even if that isn't what happened. I personally don't want Bungle in the Jungle to turn into a story along the lines of 'To fight the coming Darkness', they don't have the same feel and killing Bill just pushes the story that way and reading the same kind of ideas in both stories will get kinda boring. Bungle in the Jungle to me is more light hearted and not as darkly-realitic, thats why I read it.
So I conclusion I don't like that you killed Bill, but besides that the chapter is interesting and well developed. Also, sorry about my above rant I just can't see the story being the same with out Bill so my ramblings may not be coherant.
Anyways keep up the good work can't wait to see what you have instore for next chapter.
Author's responseWell chapter 21 is up now and it should answer some of your questions. Glad you like my interpetation of Bill so much.~Jim
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-03-14 08:10:05 PMWell to say that I am curious now would be putting things very mildly. Bill is dead? Truly dead? Is this a dream? Could be a dream as it started with him going to sleep. If not a dream, where are you planning on taking this? Of course you have many options now available but at the same point. You've completely dropped Luna from this story altogether, and I'm questioning, now that Bill is dead, where that will leave Fleur. Again, just rambling. I do have to say that the self-styled first person thinker of writing doesn't give away much of the story because it only allows you one perception for the story, and having to deal with the reactions of others rather than their motivations.
Author's responseWell now that chapter 21 is up you should be able to discern some of my motives. This is actually 2nd person, but I do have a 1st person on ffa and ff. I'll post it here sometime. Hope you enjoy.~Jim
(#) JustAReader 2007-03-14 09:12:55 PMI have to say I really hope Bill isn't dead as that would really be a bummer. On a different note that Daemon sounds like it will be cool.
Author's responseChapter 21 is up it'll answer your question about the Daemon.~Jim
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-03-14 10:37:29 PMFor a second I was hoping for an extra twist, that the statue was an enemy of some kind, maybe a sentient guard made by Voldemort. And if there really is a demon...let alone on that powerful. Wow.
Oh, right, something else happened this chapter too. Two more major characters are dead. I didn't expect Collins to go out like this, so points for creativity there, and you never expect the best friend to die in dog form, either. One thing Dark Lords shouldn't do is kill whoever Harry thinks is his friend at the time. Half kidding, I like Bill, he's a great character. We going to see the power Voldemot knows not?
Author's responseGlad you liked it. There was an extra twist. It's just not evident until chapter 21 which is up now! Thanks for reading.~Jim