Harry decides to go proactive in his Sixth year, with help from a tutor and his friends. In thic chapter, Harry continues training, writes letters, and confesses his feelings to Hermione.
(#) annabelle63 2007-03-20 09:40:51 AMSorry to say so, but I think this story is one or even the worst that I've read of yours. Normally I'm a fan of your writing, but this one I can't stand. Your Ron and Hermione are just ... bah ... I don't know. The seem to be so ... wrong together. The first chapter is not working for them. Ron seems just to be too OOC.
If you've written this one in 2003 as I asume, I have to tell you that it is eye-catching. You've improved since than a lot.
(#) AberforthsAvatar 2007-03-20 10:20:36 AMI was just thinking that I'd like to read this again, so it's nice to see you post it here. The addition of the 'Awake' chapter was a nice touch.
I guess many new to this story will see this as an overly cliched piece. However, I remember this as one of the early post-OOTP works, one which helped to make some of these plot elements cliches. It still holds up well, and Tomas was one of my favorites among your OCs.
I hope that you'll take the opportunity to remove the poker game chapter, but I can stand it if you don't.
It's good to read this again. Thanks.
- I've always liked this piece. Part of it is the Zorics, and other bits later on. The only parts I didn't like is you were too "list-y" (put your adjectives and other info in lists) but you have gotten better. Yay for more exposure of your stories!