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Prologue
The Witches of the world have a Seccret, of course poor Harry is stuck in the middle. Post Goblet of Fire.
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Harry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) selenepotter 2007-07-01
This is a great fic!
Unfortunately, because your chapters are unnamed and the chapter summarys unrevealing, I'm having to start over.Author's response
Thank you. Coming from you that means a lot you are one of my favorite authors. Sorry about the summaries but I really suck at them. The chapters are numbered however. Also you can got to my yahoo group and find them in order there and with the second book complete as well as the first two chapters of the third book of the arc. http://groups.yahoo.com/group/RotaryfileHarry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) nonylan 2007-08-13
It's great to see an original premise for a harem story instead of getting more power by being with multiple witches.
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(#) SirChris 2007-08-15
This is an interesting start. I was randomly linked to this by a friend of mine and I am intrigued by the premise, certainly. The one great problem I have with this, and it is an annoyance and nothing more, is the use of casual terms that people would never say. "Dark Tosser", for example, after the Dark Lord that frankly everyone fears. I am aware there is some need for such casual tone, but it takes away from the whole persona of "I am evil, fear me unless you are Harry who owns me :("
Nonetheless, I liked this chapter. I will continue to read. Wasn't perfect, but still a fun read and it sets up some stuff later on.
- ChrisAuthor's response
Having been there and done that I can say that its JKR's representation that is wrong.
Wog, gook, raghead, nazi's, redcoats, the list is endless. People fighting denigrate their enemies.
Perhaps that was the original reason for Riddles abuse of people using his name, after all how scary is Vulterwart, the easiest corruption?Harry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) TxA_GunFighter 2007-09-03
Outstanding start. Most guys would LOVE to have Harrt's problem.
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(#) siledubhghlase 2009-05-02
I think it's interesting that Harry has this problem and he's not even aware of it. I can't wait to read on and see what his reaction is when he finds out. It's more than just fan-girl adoration--it's outright compulsion. LOL I'm sorry, but the premise is hysterical and I love it!
Now, Tonks' letter to Amelia Bones was really good. It was a concise report of Harry's situation and living conditions and the dodgy circumstances behind them. Looks like Dumbledork is in for some trouble.
By the way: I heard the name "Dumbledork" on a Food Network Show called "Ace of Cakes." I like "Dumbledolt" too! There's also "Fumbledore" and "Fumbledork." Just to name a few.
I've read several stories involving "Moldyshorts," but the "Geezergamot" is new. Great term! Can I borrow it? LOL Other good ones I've picked up are "He-Who-Must-Be-Hyphenated," "Bald 'n' Farts," and "Snakelips."
But I digress...
I'm excited to read on because it appears Harry's allure extends much further than the young ladies he regularly associates with and if they're not careful, Hogwarts is going to be a regular brothel for our young hero.
And what about Ron? He's got a thing for Hermione. This could get nasty...
Good job!Harry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) hjl 2009-08-07
Nice start, cant wait to read the rest BUT the conversation between Emmeline and Amelia seamed more like a written report and not a conversation.
You might want to rewrite the section begining "This leaves us with some basic logistics questions:" to sound more conversational (particulary write one/two/three instead of 1/2/3 that realy breaks the flow of the text IMO!) and the section begining "The problems I foresee are:" Both of these bits seam more like a list in a formal report/essay rather then a conversation between two people....
The only other bit I would change is Amelia's responce, I believe that she would consider her next move before announcing her intentions, or failing that would phrase her orders as requests/suggestions rather then absolutes (ie could you do something rather then you will do something)
Either way I enjoyed the first chapter!Harry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) ravensuspira 2011-05-22
you got dumbledores full name wrong!
its Albus percival wulfric BRAIN dumbledore!!!!!!!!!not bryan! i loved your story p.s.Harry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) Bronze 2015-08-30
In response to ravensuspira, who gives a damn what that old goat f***'s full name is! Frankly, I like the idea spoken of in one of the Horse Clans novels. They speak about placing the living person in a canon and firing said cannon. I truly believe Dumbledork would get a blast out of it! If the old moron had a brain, it very likely rotted away before he reached his century mark. I have never liked him. Not even in cannon. He, personally, has killed more witches and wizards then Moldyshorts and his moronic followers ever could! Dumbledork tells witches and wizards to go do something and they're stupid enough to just go do it. They DO NOT appear to have the brains to simply ask why or who's my back up? As my former Headmaster use to say " If brains were polecat piss, you couldn't find theirs with a smell detector! " He was a vet of WWII. Gun collector too.Harry Potter and the Witches Secret
(#) PGHammer21 2019-11-11
To the reviewer that pointed out (correctly) the issue with enemy denigration, it's just as bad in politics (I'm referring specifically to US politics) - and BOTH sides think they can get away with it! (It's why I take great pains NOT to do it myself.) I support President trump - however, I don't denigrate the opposition (that would be stooping to their level). As Heir (later Emperor) Roger MacClintock said in "We Few" (which I not only have in hardcover, but is at my left elbow as I type this) "Not even my enemies can turn me into them - no matter what THEY do."
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