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An Exerpt of My Novel
3 reviewsI am writing a novel and this is an exerpt. Please give feedback as to whether you would read it or not. Thanks a lot!
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An Exerpt of My Novel
(#) BabiGirl787 2007-07-06
I LIKE IT. MY FAMILY IS ODD TOO BUT WE MAKE EACH OTHER LAUGH. I CAN RELATE TO THIS STORY.ITS TOUCHING HOW THEY GET ALONG.An Exerpt of My Novel
(#) Solara 2007-07-06
I noticed a few spelling mistakes, which were particularly distracting, and I really wish you had included in this short excerpt the purpose behind your story... other than that, I think it's good. Definitely try and post more of your story up here.An Exerpt of My Novel
(#) OkieDokie63 2009-03-24
There are definitely some spelling and grammatical errors that make it difficult to read. The items you had in parenthesis should either be separated by commas or put in their own sentences. The story could use some streamlining as well. The gist of the excerpt was fine. Keep writing, learn more about sentence and paragraph structure, and take some creative writing courses. Good attempt.Author's response
Wow... I just re-read this for the first time in several years. I wrote this almost five years ago and I cannot believe how terrible this is. Thanks for the advice... but I can assure you that these things have already been fixed. You should check out my more recent stories on fanfiction.net, they're newer and honestly better. http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1802223/BlackMasquerade
There's the link if you want to check it out, I recommend "Don't Let Go" and "Misfire", which are two of my best. To be honest, everything on that channel is pretty good save "Partners" and "Vendetta", they're not fantastic.
I would love to hear more of your criticisms, it's not too often that an honest reviewer comes along. Thank you very much for your comments!
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