(#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-09-01Absolutely brilliant start. The first chapter is cut completely short, so hopefully you'll be able to fix that at some point. Other than that, the only possible problem was Orestes' mention of using a wand. We've only seen staffs, spears and swords thus far, which is why I thought it might have been an error.
Eagerly awaiting both chapter 3 and the rest of chapter 1.
(#) PhillyHomer 2007-10-07Fascinating story. I love the concept it's simply amazing. As for the story itself it is brilliant though I don't like Astinos being capable of doing magic I can live with it. The training of Spartans was wonderful . The explanation of magic was quite good.Leandros' character is done quite well he is a true Spartan even if he isn't from here. I look forward to more of Leonidas in the next chapter also I wonder what Gorgo thinks of Leandros I hope you address in the next chapter. I eagerly await your next chapter!
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