- i very much enjoy this story!
you are a very good writer
its getting intense!!
please please please update?!
(#) x_iero_addiction_x 2007-12-08aww that went from all cute
to OH NO NOT BRENDON
this story is GREAT!
And yes it is easier to read like that with the paragraph thingys.
- its not that is harder to read its just that i think you should try and connect each of them.
see lets just picture is a play. (cuz my imagination is pretty wide and i do imagine them doing whatever you write)
so usually when you get a scene its everything that revolves around that place and time in one scene.
I think i'm not making myself clear.
For example, there are part were its sort of the same shit happening but you divided up and it kind of gives the impression that something different is about to happen when in fact its the same.
Oh forget it, i probably just confused the hell out of ya.
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