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Hell on Earth

by Yrtria 6 Reviews

Azkaban's hard on Harry. He struggles to keep his sanity while the world moves on without him.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres:  - Characters:  - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2008/01/29 - Updated: 2008/02/20 - 2001 words

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  • Griffon Reborn

    (#) Nautilus 2008-01-29 09:42:46 PM

    well, i can say thank you for not making it the typical harry turns into a dragon and excapes the prison story... thank god...

    this is good the pace of the story is great... and ur style allows for a true reflection of time, with the activities happening in the wiz world and with harry... congrats for a well thought out structure....

    also like that harry wasn't immediately able to learn occulumency and/or take control of teh dementors... this feels for realistic... so well done again.

    looking forward to see where you take it from here.

    Author's response

    Thank you! I was worried that chapter two would look "spotty" regarding the timeline. As the author's note said, it started out a lot shorter.

    Super-power Harry stories can be fun, but not quite what I'm aiming for here. Keep watching.. I have a few tricks up my sleeve yet.. :)
  • Griffon Reborn

    (#) shawnpickett 2008-01-30 08:29:20 AM

    Interesting so far, I will second the previous review in being glad that you didn't fall into the usual cliche of Harry getting super powered in prison and escaping or killing Voldemort when he raided Azkakban after exposing Harry's innocence. It's a little suprising that nobody in the Order got word of Fudge's super secret Wizengamout meeting, even if they didn't know the subject of the meeting, I would think they would have known it happened, and the date in relation to Harry's disappearance would be highly suspect. Great chapter overall, thank you.
  • Griffon Reborn

    (#) Clell65619 2008-01-30 10:42:27 AM

    - Tommy's been angry since Harry disappeared? Has Lucy gone off the reservation?

    Author's response

    I do have something to explain this, but unfortunately I did not put it into chapter two. Now that I look at it, there is a bit of a plot hole without it there. Hmm.. how to fix this...
  • Griffon Reborn

    (#) Alorkin 2008-01-31 01:22:16 PM

    A fascinating idea. Harry's set-p was exceptionally well done, being as there was sufficient real evidence to implicate him. that the Death Eater was the onl witness and that Fudgey had stacked the court with his own bootlickers didn't hurt at all. It doesn't surprise me a single bit that Fudge would continue to deny Voldemort's return. As long as the magical population thinks Voldy is MIA, he keeps his job.

    Chapter two was an interesting effect. Harry is actually seeing his friends through whatever magic you choose to use.
    He knows that they're still hoping for him, but the constant presence of the Dementors are wearing him down.

    I have placed this on my alerts list and hope to see where you take this. Alorkin

    Author's response

    Life and work haven't given me a lot of time to work on this, but I have chapter three about a third done. I have a couple days to devote to it, and I hope to finish the next installment by this weekend (cross my fingers).

    The next chapter will be some more set-up for the rest of the story. Expect a longer chapter to hold all of this!
  • Griffon Reborn

    (#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-02-21 06:49:57 PM

    Good chapter, choppy but readable.

    gunny
  • Griffon Reborn

    (#) Cateagle 2008-03-28 12:13:07 AM

    Hmm, it's interesting that, whatever means he's using to keep up with them, Harry's still managing to keep an eye on his friends and stay sane there in Azkaban. I have to wonder what'll happen to old Fudgie with indisputable proof of Tom's return surfaces.

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