Harry share the wealth, then spins a story. Harry declines a few slytherins and makes an offer.
- I loved it. The "share the wealth" bit with the other guys in his dorm was inspired and should do wonders to improve things there. His polite and formal rejections are handled with class and his asking Daphne out was a beautiful move; esp. since he could've been rather more agressive about matters.
The letter from the twins was as hilarious as one could expect. If nothing else, I can see Harry providing them with several "interesting" developments at a later date.
I thought that "story" he told Dumbles, esp. following so close to "canon" was a very nice touch indeed and covered how you'd realistically expect matters to go; the bet with Neville was just icing on the cake for rubbing it in to Dumbles.
Finally, I'll re-iterate that this reader would very much like to see the backstory on just what plot the Weasley's and Dumbledore were up to.
Author's response- Well, I would share the pictures if I were ever to fall into some strange Bizarro-world where women would send me nekkid pictures (the Internet excepted of course)
- I think that Harry couldn't have been more aggressive and remained Harry. his asking her out was tantamount to the biggest emotional risk he has ever taken.
- the twin's letter might just be a feint, a false white flag to lull Harry into a false sense of security you know...
- Messing with Dumbles is fun.
- But what happened with the Weasley's isn't important to the story... heh heh heh. All will be revealed.
- Well there is one thing we learned in this chapter. Daphne's father is a scumbag who should be executed via anal impalement.
I do wonder what exactly went on with the Weasleys, Dumbledore and Remus. It seems even with the death of Riddle he is still trying to control Harry. It will be interesting to see how things shape up from this point on. with Harry no longer being a target of an insane Dark Lord he should have more time to deal with the Dumbledore and his cronies.
Author's response- Yeah, pretty much.
- The Weasleys, Remus and Dumbles will be explained in story (eventually)
- Having dealt with Tom, Harry isn't going to expend an ounce of energy worrying about Dumbles and his cronies. He's going to live, have fun, and grow up. Not necessarily in that order.
(#) Particle_Accelerator 2008-02-25 12:32:16 AMInteresting chapter, again. I'm interested in seeing who you are going to pair Harry up with throughout the story. Most fics I've seen with a Daphne pairing turn out very well (probably because we know so little about her, anything goes for the author.) Of course, being a die-hard Harmonian, I'd love to see Hermione ultimately with Harry. Somehow I sense that will not happen in this piece. Anyways, nice job, but look out for character misspellings (Zambini is really Zabini.)
- Now that was an interesting chapter. I thought that the way Harry dealt with Pansy was a bit cruel. However, given that she had betrayed Draco in that manner and then tried to bare-face her way out by claiming she did not know about the proposal means she loses a lot of sympathy. (BTW - I am tiresomely Hufflepuff in my attitude to ladies; I would probably have tried to shield her from the consequences of her actions).
I really enjoyed Harry's rejections for the other Slytherin girls, though. Millie's reaction was unexpected and pleasing. Daphne and Tracey, meanwhile, have been given abundant food for thought.
That clause in the contract was horrible and borders on legalised rape. The nature of those photographs also makes me wonder if Daphne's father can be trusted with his daughter when he clearly is willing to treat her like a slab of meat to be auctioned off to the highest bidder. Now, I wonder how Harry's date with Daphne will go. Who knows, Harry might eventually decide to make an offer to Lord Greengrass on his terms.
Hermione and Ron's 'relationship' is going to end in tears. The only question that remains to be answered is whether it will happen sooner or later. Hermione wouldn't be the first woman to equate 'great sex' with 'love' and regret it for a decade or more.
A light hearted but surprisingly deep story. I'm enjoying where you are taking this.
BenRG's Rating: 8/10
Author's response- Just to be clear, Pansy was unaware she had been offered to Neville and Harry, they were being intentionally abusive to a particularly hateful bitch. They knew they were being cruel, and felt a little bit bad about it, but still felt (a) she deserved it and (b) it was funny.
- More than casual dating with Daphne is possible, just not expected within the confines of my outline... Of course once the actors start ad libing...
- Yes, Ron/Hermione is not going to end well, but that's all I'm going to say about it.
- Yes, Harry should have won Dean and Seamus over to his side with that move. As others have wondered, -- what the devil did Ginny and Mrs. Weasley do to Harry (I believe you said Arthur was there, not a participant). If they tried to drug Harry, I'd have hoped he'd had the brains to worry about Hermione
Good solid chapter.
Author's response- Art is meant to be shared...
- No potions were involved in the falling out
- I just hope the actual story is worth the build up it is generating.
(#) Maverick512000 2008-02-25 06:25:27 AMGreat chapter in what is becoming a great story. I was wondering though is this going to be a Harry/multi? It was mentioned in chapter 1 in regards to the Patils that it was allowed under wizard law.
Author's response- No. Harry's not looking for a life long commitment just yet.