You tasted blood when you were nine years old.
- This is an eerie strange little story. I think that the second person point of view works quite well for it considering the voices that Hojo seems to hear.
The confusion of past and present that the flashback seems to represent works well for your depiction of Hojo's insanity too.
These lines are especially powerful:
"If they take it away from you," she says, "then you will rebuild it."
You understand what the voice means. He will be your symbol. Your regret. Your redemption. Your feelings will be so strong in him that he will think they are his own. And you, free of those things, will continue while he remains dead, but walking.
Your writing is very insightful and an excellent depiction of Hojo's motives.
(#) Kasan_Soulblade 2012-10-15 08:25:27 PMYou know, cue the shock, but I think I like your Hojo.
This was perhaps his last moment of sanity. Granted it's a grim one, the jealousy, frusteration, grief, all are very real and human.
Then the pulling of the trigger.
His decision, Jenova inspired that utterly destroys him. I wonder, later on, if he realizes how he was manipulated. If he ever has that "what have I done, was driven to do" epiphiny. It would be... intersesting to see that penned.
Not that I am laying down hints of any kind.
On the other hand via Vincent and his actions/redemption conplex in the game prehaps it doesn't have to be written.
After all vincent lives it with every breath of his dialogue. The idea of him in his "natural state" being a representation of Hojo's guilt and his transformations being a representation of Hojo's maddness... It's an intriguing concept that I might just have to pen myself...
Unless you want to, then the floor is all yours.
I feel I have to give credit. If one writer can make me pull a one eighty on a character I only saw as bashing/loathing bait... and only as such...
Well it's powerful stuff.
Further kudos for making it so... concise. What you do with a few lines is awe inspiring despite being sparse.