Voldemort's plan starts to unfold
(#) Genericrandom5 2008-03-15 02:05:48 PMWhile I'm well and truly used to how you write Harry in your stories, this time, you failed to make it even remotely believable at all. Summarizing Harry and Hermionie's changes, alongside a great deal of summarized implied political maneuvering as well as having all of three actual scenes in the whole chapter... it feels like you were bored with this part, and just wanted to get it over with.
It just feels like a throwaway rather than a chapter to me.
Author's responseDon't worry, you don't have to read it. I'll likely stop writing after this story is finished in any event; at least long stories. I've probably written too many long stories as it is.
- Well only you can know if you have more long stories up your sleave. I like long stories. I do think the good guys need to start taking the offensive. Dead deatheaters are a lot less trouble in the long run. I would think that some of the brotherhood and some of the order would agree. Thanks for writing. W.
(#) PerfesserN 2008-03-15 03:07:38 PMPlans within plans within plans.
I actually like the longer stories - reading your works inspired me to start writing and submitting my own. I've become a writer. I attend and submit original works to a local writer's group and have had very good reviews from the online as well as the ink and paper crowd.
The fan-fiction community would be diminished if you stopped contributing.
Me, I'll stop when they pry my cold dead fingers from the keyboard. . .
Author's responseThanks! Maybe if something that wasn't a redo story of some sort pops into my head, that would be different. Anyway, I need to go back to nonfiction for a while
- Dr T, I've enjoyed your stories very much, whether they were long or short. I hope that if you do take a break from fan fiction for a while that eventually you return well refreshed and with more of your fantastic stories! As for the current chapter.... I wish that neither Remus or Ron had been attaked! It's a good thing that Dean recognised what Flint was holding, or there might have been more casualties. I hope that they figure out what's happening to Moody! Sigh, it's sad to see a house that prides itself on intelligence get caught up in Voldie's stupidity. As always, many thanks for the latest chapter! At least Harry and Hermione are coping so far, now they have to deal with the attacks at the game! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
- if I know so far ow you like to 'twist' things I have an idea that the obvious 'victim' would be. We'll see just who and I think this will Blow the roof off of the fight as I think After he grieves, Harry will be hunting down Voldy and his minions as quickly and harshly as possible. Trying to finish it so he can have all the time he can with Hermione.
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-03-15 10:24:53 PMThe grenade idea was incredible. Really top notch work with it. I'm surprised that it worked on the Hogwarts grounds, but it works well with the story.
Hermione's question is an interesting one. I think it's pretty obvious that Remus died. He was stabbed twice, with the silver knife left inside his chest right next to an exploding grenade. Harry's statement probably didn't apply to him, though. If I had to guess, I'd say Ron is dead, either him or someone else caught by the blast.
The other thing in this chapter that I found quite uniquely impressive was the Ravenclaw Sisterhood's allegience. Well done.
Looking forward to more.
(#) alec_potter 2008-03-15 11:04:03 PMGood chapter, though i am disappointed with the death of Lupin. This is war.
I feel this is your best fic till date, really loved it. I thought you were becoming a bit repetitive, but this is an amazing original piece. Your long stories really rock.
Keep writing, hopefully Harry's side will start hitting back soon.