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In the Shadows

Midori thought she was an average girl,but that changed when she had her first encounter with a demon . . . something that should'nt even exist. Full summary inside.

Category: Fantasy - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Romance - Characters:  - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2008/03/24 - Updated: 2008/03/24 - 858 words

Reviews

• In the Shadows

  (#) Wolf_of_the_Anbu 2008-03-24 04:15:51 PM

  WOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! ITS is sooo awesome. What was it that Kyo had to accomplish? (DUN DUN DUUUUUN) Anyways update more.. and stuff... yeah...

• In the Shadows

  (#) knightblade890 2008-03-25 04:13:06 PM

  good story. i loved it. the first couple sentences set the mood perfectly. i think you should go into it with more detail of the fight and scenery. thanks, update soon

• In the Shadows

  (#) Thelionwaits 2008-03-29 02:48:18 PM

  Very exciting! You didn't hem and haw to get to the fight, you just plunged the reader right into it! Well done! Is your influence manga/anime or are you going with actual Chinese or Japanese mythos?
  
  You do, however, have a few spelling difficulties, but who doesn't, eh? Some of your sentences seem a little long too. That's not a problem, and is easily cured with a period or two here and again.
  
  Nicely done!

  Author's response

  Sorry for the late reply. Yeah, I know I messed up some. My influence is pretty much anime/manga, lol, I watch too much and decided to make a story that could hopefully, one day, become a comic. High hopes, but oh, well. Anyways, thank you so much for reading/reviewing and the advice!!

• In the Shadows

  (#) johnnysteps 2008-06-08 06:14:07 PM

  Well, I agree with Thelionwaits.
  Straight to the action.Also,like Wolf of the Anbu, I want to know what Kyo has to do.Very great!

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