The last of the contracts are returned, Luna takes it very well. Dumbledore eavesdrops... Moody makes threats.
(#) SaraWinters 2008-04-11 11:51:40 PMLOL This time I was laughing so hard I thought someone would wake up. I'm surprised Dumbledore's reaction wasn't to immediately give away that he was listening. Maybe Harry should leak a fake story to the paper about what happened. Or several. Keep everyone guessing. I do want to find out what happened, but this is actually more fun.
Oh, and the part with Luna was genius.
- snicker Oh, I love that scenario for dealing with Tom and how Harry is having fun with the MOBB (Manipulative Old Bearded Bastard). Dumbles seems to be at the root of the betrayals, knowing, seemingly, what buttons to push to get Molly & Ginny, as well as Remus, to go along with his devious plans. I have to wonder if these were for the greater good of Albus Dumbledore, his vision of the "greater good" of wizarding Britain, or some other purpose that he could convince himself that such a betrayal served?
The bit with Moody was a nice touch. I don't think Harry and Daphne are certain, yet, how long term their relationship is, but it sure looks to have potential. If things stay well between them, I can see him surprising her at Christmas with something more than ordinary presents. Meanwhile, I suspect Daphne and Tracey, along with Neville and Hannah will be enlightening Harry on all the social etiquette he's going to have to master and the detailed knowledge that'll be needed to minimize strife.
I've got mixed feelings about Remus, sure Dumbledore talked him into it, but I can't help but think that he did have free choice (I do wonder, though, how long it took Dumbles to wear down his resistance).
Oh, just as another story to help drive Albus spare, how about a reverse on your set up for "The Distaff Side" and have Harry send Tom to another worldline where he can live, giving both of them semi-immortality due to the prophecy?
Author's response- As far as Molly and Ginny, I see them much like the classic 'liberals' of the 1960s. "Some of my best friends aren't pureblood, but I wouldn't want my daughter to MARRY one..."
- Remus on the other hand has other problems.
- I just figured Moody had to be related to SOMEONE, so why not (besides who better to give the 'hurt her, you're road kill' speech?)
(#) morriganscrow 2008-04-12 04:50:54 AMI almost choked on my own spit at the scene with Luna, while the last section was pure comedy genius.
I foresee considerable pain in the future for the Patils' dopey brother, and the way Harry broke the news to Susan was lovely.
Great chapter, great story.
Author's response- Thanks.
- A nice chapter, although it had the feel of interlinked vignettes rather than a single whole.
The rejections were nice. Luna really likes playing with boys' heads, doesn't she? I'm with Daphne: she isn't really that odd and crazy - she just finds it fun to use that reputation to get away with being outrageous.
Susan is definately high on the list of suitable witches who would be a dutiful wife even if Harry actually loved someone else (although he would never do that to a girl). I think that she genuinely likes him too. If Daphne doesn't work out, she is on the list of those to call.
The Patils were genuinely funny. It is tragically believable that their brother would have offered them (for an insultingly small amount of money) as if they were chattel rather than his sisters. Some cultures have never really come to accept that women are people too. However, I strongly suspect that Mr. Patil is going to learn what pain and embarrassment really are over the next few months.
The fake 'How I Killed (or not) Voldemort' story was hillarious. Naturally, Dumbles sucked it up, hook line and sinker. Well, at least Moody gets a holiday out of it.
Somehow, it is totally in-character for Remus to be standing all heart-broken in the rain and bitterly cursing his weaknesses rather than actually doing something to make things right. Sometimes, these self-loathing types are their own worst enemies.
You clearly imply that Dumbledore was behind Remus' break with Harry. Why am I not surprised? I think that Harry is running out of reasons to keep the old fool alive.
BenRG's Rating: 7.5/10