Chapter 6! Moving along!
(#) Darksnider05 2008-05-09 11:45:14 PMHe's a bit of a cry baby really....
Author's responseDon't worry, I promise Harry will not be crying for much longer! In fairness though, Harry has gone through a lot of stressful things! All the people he loves have died, and his friends have betrayed him! Maybe you never cry, but I think that in this situation, it would be very normal.
Thank you for your review.
(#) Marshmallow 2008-05-11 08:48:36 AMI want Ginny.
And why did he need books if he got them from ravenclaw's vault. that didnt make sense to me.
but it was good
i liek it. i want to see where you go with this. maybe you can mke his animagis a pheonix? or he can have two? that would be so cool!
(#) GryffindorDragon 2008-05-12 01:54:14 PMThere's a bit of disconnect with the last chapter. We last saw Harry trying hard not to laugh out loud at the Goblin names, now he stops crying when going to enter Knockturn Alley. When did he start crying again?
Nice staff (well, mostly)
- Lol, this story is definitely a most epic fail.
Friends all of a sudden disliking/abandoning Harry.
Letters from the grave about how NOT to trust Dumbledore.
Gringotts visit with Griphook.
Finding out he's the heir of Gryf and absolutely loaded.
Getting a Staff.
I honestly don't believe you could fit anymore cliche's into this story.
(#) buddamacca 2008-09-16 01:26:21 AMI noticed in a previous chapter that you had asked for no flames when we review, so please look upon this as constructive critisism.
please have a beta-reader or stop writing, you need to set a story flow, a timeline and to flesh it out with some details.