FicWad

First of all I'd like to say that I really enjoy your story. I like that you went for a more obscure pairing rather than the obvious and overdone ones, for that I can't thank you enough. I can't tell you if you hit their characterizations right on as I was never fluent in FMA verse to begin with and after a year of not watching a single episode or reading a single page of the manga I imagine that I'm quite rusty with the stuff I do know. However, I can tell you that you need to go deeper into the characters personalities. They may be drawn in 2d but their character certainly isn't. Another thing I must say is that your writing needs more you in it. Right now I'm not really seeing your style shining trough. Specific style is what makes people remember your writing. I know it may be hard to find it but you will, trust me. Also flesh it out a bit. I feel like I'm watching a skeleton at the moment. Just like gemstones a story needs to be polished and cute depending on how you want it to be perceived. Other than that, you have great potential and so does this piece. Thanks for writing and keep at it! -Pinky