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Can I get someone's real opinion about this...?
These are the first one-shots I've ever written, and I'd really like to have some con-crit on them. [both are My Chemical Romance fanfiction.]

The first one is based off the poem from '10 Things I Hate About You,' hence the title. I feel a bit awkward about writing a story around a poem- especially slash, which I have no experience with. So what do you think?
[10 Things I Hate About You]

The second is titled 'More Than Words Could Ever Say.' By now, everyone in the MCR fandom should know that Gerard is a smoker. They probably all know about Lindsey, Gerard's wife, being pregnant. This is a short story about Gerard's struggle to grasp that he is going to be /father/, and that his addiction could possibly be downfall. I'm not really comfortable with this one, so I'd really like to have some comments.
[More Than Words Could Ever Say]

Thank you.
Damned thing. The links didn't show up. Either way, I'm assuming you can all click onto my profile and look for them.

And if you're too lazy to...

10 Things I Hate About You - http://ficwad.com/story/118087

More Than Words Could Ever Say - http://ficwad.com/story/118774