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Can I get some con-crit?
These are the first one-shots I've ever written, and I'd really like to have some con-crit on them. [both are My Chemical Romance fanfiction.]

The first one is based off the poem from '10 Things I Hate About You,' hence the title. I feel a bit awkward about writing a story around a poem- especially slash, which I have no experience with. So what do you think?
[http://ficwad.com/story/118087]


The second is titled 'More Than Words Could Ever Say.' By now, everyone in the MCR fandom should know that Gerard is a smoker. They probably all know about Lindsey, Gerard's wife, being pregnant. This is a short story about Gerard's struggle to grasp that he is going to be /father/, and that his addiction could possibly be downfall. I'm not really comfortable with this one, so I'd really like to have some comments.
[http://ficwad.com/story/118774]

Thanks to anyone who can rate/review/give criticism. ^-^