Review for I'll never let you leave, never let you breathe.

I'll never let you leave, never let you breathe.

(#) japulapu 2011-08-12 08:53:07 AM

yes, i guess the tiredness explains the few grammar slip ups. But they were very few and weren't really a big deal. Well no one saw that anti-climax coming did they? It was an interesting chapter, you played a clever trick, by saying Frank knew what Gerard did, and you came so close to give all the answers, but just turned the entire thing around by Frank saying what he did. That was good work. It doesn't look like you're playing for time, just building up the suspense. Great work.

Author's response

Well yeah, haha. Tiredness does that.

I'm glad you think so, I like to build suspense and have people wondering. :)

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