- Hey! Ficwad is messing up my updates so sorry for the late-ish review. Right, so it's not really progressed much. You sort of repeated the same things and it was kind of only a chapter for nostalgia. I think Lazer is becoming slightly Mary-Sue. She's a bit too perfect and a bit too 'been there, done that'. She seems kind of flawless which can get a bit annoying. Also, you used 'rathered' in this chapter, which is acceptable but not preferred. I like how Frank is in complete awe of Lazer and I found that really adorable. I also found the 'deer in headlights' bit very funny but slightly confusing. I enjoyed it overall.
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