i liked it, it was sad/depressing internal monologue but not pointless.. and all the description of Naruto's pain from his injury (and otherwise--the villagers) made me really feel it too..
it would be nice if you could get a beta, though, just to smooth out a few things like some kinda incomplete sentences here and there, the occasional misused word and such.. but really, nothin' that made it confusing at all and nothing that detracts from the story because i really want to read more