Wow, that story is quite original and exciting.
Please discount the review I left for the first chapter, concerning the spacing between lines. I had only looked at the first chapter then and was somewhat frustrated by my eyes hurting. I hadn't seen that you already had worked on it for the other chapters.
Two minor things I noticed: sometimes the html for single letters is off and shows as "&8023;" or something like this instead. You might want to check into this. Also you keep misspelling "Occlumency" and "Occlumens". While it's nothing major (and other than that your spelling and writing style is very good), it keeps jarring me out of the story.
I'm glad to have Severus and Remus as mentors for Harry and the Ministry-crew as true to Harry. While there are a few good stories with manip-Dumbles and bad Ron & Hermione, I very much prefer stories with true friends. :)
Tom and Harry are allies now; please tell me it won't end up as Harry/Tom. I really, really abhor the very idea of this pairing and if it is, I'll stop reading now before I get squicked out. I can deal with nearly every other pairing.
Anyway, hope you'll update again soon! :)
Author's response
The funky "&8023;" is a formatting issue that I have to comb through the story for every time I upload onto Ficwad. Apparently it doesn't like Word 2003 as much as it did the older version i was using. I do try to edit all of that out. Sorry if I missed one.
As far as the Occlumency/Occlumens thing goes, i looked on the Lexicon and could have sworn it was spelled the way I have been using it. I have, however seen the err of my ways, and will alter the spelling from here on out. Thanks for bringing that to my attention.
I can honestly tell you and everyone out there that this will NOT be a Harry/Tom slash story. That, however is the only comment I will make on pairings at this time.
Cheers!