Review for Scars
(#) Neophyte_Ronin 2007-09-17 11:32:09 PM
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: Technically it is narrated by someone who's obviously got a street edge to the tongue, and therefore there are occasional incomplete sentences... but the profanity is spelled correctly as well. This isn't a major issue, anyway.
Style: I mentioned the street tongue. This has style in spades.
Flow/Structure/Pace: It's short, slick, and slips straight off the tongue. Excellent execution.
Plot: That's why they call him one bitter motherfucker!
Characterization: Reno didn't get sly over nothing. Many have written and expounded on theories to explain his personal grudge with the rat race and this story does it quite well. It's believable.
Canon Consistency: Well here's a slight point of contention. Literally nothing has been written in the canon about Reno's origins, how he truly felt about the Sector Seven incident, or whether or not his straight-laced superior officer would actually get drunk and carve a profanity on his back. As it stands, the last one is hard to believe. Still, you got the working relationship with Rude, and you mentioned the red tattoos, offering an explanation about them. But like Grammar, some adherence to the canon is generally expected, and therefore you aren't going to suffer if I rank you low in this category.
Originality: I never heard anyone write Final Fantasy VII like he was Frank fuckin' Miller, okay? Get someone to applaud you.
Does this fit into the nomination for Best Short Fic as Pied Flycatcher had said? No, it belongs in either the Drama or the Angst categories. But damned if I see another story that's shorter than this one... or told with as much energy as this one.
Overall: You did okay on my score sheet. To be blunt, Hemingway would bear hug you before blowing his head off.
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