Oh, wow! That was really good! I love how you put one minute earlier and everything!!!
Also, how you put the same word that was on the line above like:
Watching, hopeless.” Etc.
That was excellent! I think if you look back on this writing in years on, you’d be proud of how talented you were!!! Not many thirteen year olds (you are 13, right?) have your kind of writing skills! I know plenty of fifteen year olds who suck at writing!!!