I think it was a quite funny story. ^^
I've been reading several of your stories and a couple of them, this included, should get a "real" story to them. They're more like side-stories, really.. at least in my opinion.
Author's response
First I gotta say that I was really glad to see your review because no one's been reading my fics lately, so I guess I feel a little .... neglected xD I guess it just means I need to put out more fics.
But you're totally right! I intentionally write my short fics/one-shots with the idea that they ar pre established characters, so I dont accidentially go into long conveluted explinations about who they are etc and forget the story. Howver, I have wanted to do a deeper story on some of my one-shot characters, and I deffinately think that Luca and Kevin would be two that I wouldn't mind writing a longer story on at all. If enough people want me to do it, I might just, well... do that ^__^
Again, thanks for the review! And I'm sorry for the extra long response!