but she didn't learn anything from spying on brendon, aside from not being in the room when he stopped there. and won't that be awkward when he finds out she doesn't have one....
and you can't expect people to read more if they dislike what they read at the start. and critizism is meant to help. i'm hoping that by letting you know things that stuck out in my mind, you can get the feedback to help guide your writting.