Hey btw, just a suggestion, you always seem to make your story darker and thats when you lose sight of the plot. Its fine to make them have a darker side, but dont just completly make everything dark and angry and stuff? You know what I mean? Just a suggestion.
Author's response
Lol, see there's the problem. I don't have a plot. If I had one, I might be able to do this better, but I have no idea what I'm doing. I thought I did, but now I don't. Blah.