Review for Hamsters in a Cage

Hamsters in a Cage

(#) Still_Anonymous 2008-01-03 09:08:01 PM

I find most original fiction to be both boring and unimaginative, but this was neither. It was very amusing and held my attention until the end.

I did have a little trouble understanding exactly what was going on when Shredder encountered the difference. It was a little too much in the rodent world for me to easily visualize.

I also noticed that you started a large proportion of sentences with the word "she." This can be a quite unwieldy when read aloud and is not normally considered good prose. On the other hand, I have seen best-selling authors do this, so I wouldn't worry about it too much. :)

Anyway, I really did enjoy the story. You have renewed my hope that I might, occasionally, keep from clicking away completely disgusted when I'm in the original fiction section.

~Still Anonymous

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