Good job. It must have been difficult taking on the wonderful characters of Jane Austen. You did a good job of giving justice to her work.
The transition from daydream back to reality confused me a little and I had to read back to realize that it was a daydream. You may take that into consideration next time for easier understanding. But then again, it might just have also been me being slow.
No, other people have mentioned trouble with the transitions too. If you're slow, then so are they.