Well, you're off to a generally good start with some novel ideas and approaches but the overall readability of the story is severely compromised by a lot of mispellings and wrong word choices. I'd agree with pi3142 that you really need a good beta (I'll offer my services if need be, I've a fair amount of experience as one - drop me an email if you're interested).
Thanks for the offer for a beta.
I'll send you part two of Power of the Void.
I still have to finish part two of Prophesy.