Review for Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts

Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts

(#) Terdwilicker 2008-03-22 10:49:24 AM

That was good. A bit short, but good. Harry's maturity level is surprisingly high, considering how little proper schooling and adult socialization he's done over the years to fight Voldy. Storming off to comfort Hermione is exactly the right thing to do, and her response to Ron was spot on. IN the next chapter you'll have to either have their conversation or skip it and deal with him explaining his relationship to Daphne, which is the next point of contention. Any woman who wants Harry has to deal with Hermione baggage, and the jealousy and suspicion that comes with it. Even if its only friendship, she'll always wonder, and other people will whisper and women REALLY HATE THAT, the whispering. They take it very personally, just the implication. You're old enough to know that and can make it a central point of the next chapter. Enjoy the Spring weather and looking forward to the next chapter.

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