Review for Defeat
Defeat
(#) fyre_byrd 2005-10-02 06:48:28 PM
This is a very effective drabble. You have the hang of using words sparingly, but to excellent effect.
I only have one question: how does Lulu play in all of those belts? Heh, just kidding. You'd think the game designers would either a) dress the female characters more practically, or b)give them a change of clothes every now and again when they need to be especially active. But of course, you'd think wrong.
I enjoy this story mainly just for the fact that Lulu gets to beat the boys. She seems to me like she would have been a tom-girl growing up.
I only have one question: how does Lulu play in all of those belts? Heh, just kidding. You'd think the game designers would either a) dress the female characters more practically, or b)give them a change of clothes every now and again when they need to be especially active. But of course, you'd think wrong.
I enjoy this story mainly just for the fact that Lulu gets to beat the boys. She seems to me like she would have been a tom-girl growing up.
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