Review for I Told You So
I Told You So
(#) fyre_byrd 2005-10-02 06:53:22 PM
Again, I like this brief drabble for exploring Wakka's point of view. He's such an amiable pushover in the game. I am glad you let him be a little more fesity here.
My one criticism is that the last line reads a bit oddly. It almost sounds like Wakka is asking this question to himself or that the point of view has suddenly shifted to Lulu at the end. I suggest "Do you even say 'I told you so' to yourself?"
As always though, that's just my opinion.
My one criticism is that the last line reads a bit oddly. It almost sounds like Wakka is asking this question to himself or that the point of view has suddenly shifted to Lulu at the end. I suggest "Do you even say 'I told you so' to yourself?"
As always though, that's just my opinion.
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