Review for Motorcycle

Motorcycle

(#) Kazikall 2008-04-07 02:57:41 AM

Love how you have started it so far. Keep up the good work. HPHR has always been my favorite ship. Maybe it is because I can't stand flippant and shallow girls.

Smart women all the way.

Couple things to improve though. First is the lack of questions being asked. Starting from Harry accepting the guy from Gringotts. Next the gang not asking how or where the sword came from. And then the snake.

Just some things that did not seem to flow or was taking for granted when I read this story so far.

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