I'd review the chapter, but it pales when compared to the author's note... Loved the author's note! Well... crap.
Anyway: "Thy make sense maiden?" doesn't sound too good.
How about: "Thy words maketh sense"? or "Thou maketh sense"? Or better yet "Thy words ring true" or something like that.
- Oh sure, where were you at three am when I was trying to write in Thor-eese.
- Seriously, when I do a reedit, "Thy words ring true" will be the new phrasing... And here I thought everyone would comment on crusty old Amelia being called a maiden...