The main issue I have with what you have written are all the Deux Ex Machina magics you pulled to give Harry the freedom he needs. It's all a bit to convenient.
He doesn't really have to work to get what he needs. It's just dropped into his lap. No challenge what so ever. What's worse it all seems like one big cliche used by "Lazy" writers that want to get to the "good part".
This is not meant as a flame, just constructive critisisme.
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