I'm too tired to do an inciteful review. ("too tired" is a code phrase for "too inept".)
I've read several different story chapters today and your's were the most exciting. Not exciting because of stairways into dark basements, battles fought in the road, or Albus's fooling around with Filch, but exciting because I wanted to to know what Hermione was going to do and find out. You've portrayed her in a very favorable light.
Thank you for sharing your work.