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Well, this chapter does have lots of cliches, though those can be used in novel ways, so I'm not going to complain, yet, about those. I think my biggest complaint about this chapter is that it feels so rushed and squished together, like you put it together in a hurry. I do think you could redo it and work on it to make it read better and be more enjoyable for the readers.
That said, it's an energetic style of writing that does pull the reader along.